Using your 5 senses
Show Not Tell
Telling Sentence: It was a hot day. What would you see on a hot day?
Telling Sentence: It was a hot day. What would you hear on a hot day?
Telling Sentence: It was a hot day. What would you smell on a hot day?
Telling Sentence: It was a hot day. What would you taste on a hot day?
Telling Sentence: It was a hot day. What would you touch on a hot day?
See: The sun shining. Red and sweaty faces. Hear: Splashing at the pool. Ice cream truck music. Smell: Food on the grill. Chlorine. Sweaty kids. Taste: Salty sweat. Grilled food, ice cream. Touch: the burning metal of a seatbelt. The warmth of the sun.
Telling: It was a hot day.
Showing Sentence: The sun was shining, keeping us red, sweaty, and uncomfortable.
Telling: It was a hot day.
Showing Sentence: I got in my car and was careful when I touched the burning metal seatbelt. I felt like I was in an oven!
Telling: It was a hot day.
Showing Sentence: I took my class outside for recess. As soon as we walked outside, I felt the warmth of the sun all over my body. I immediately started sweating. My students happily ram around the playground, not seeming to mind the burning pavement. One look at their red sweaty faces, showed me they were happy to be outside.
Telling: It was a hot day.
Showing Sentence: I took my class outside for recess. As soon as we walked outside, I felt the warmth of the sun all over my body. I immediately started sweating . My students happily ram around the playground, not seeming to mind the burning pavement . One look at their red sweaty faces , showed me they were happy to be outside.
Telling: It was a hot day.
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